Thursday, September 29, 2011

Reflections on Revision



It takes me a while to write a paper. For a three page paper, I usually need to set aside at least six hours. Writing is rather annoying to me, because it is such a timely process. I think I’m an okay writer, though. I think that what I write usually sounds intelligent, and I have an understanding of basic grammar and sentence structure.
I never revised in High School. I guess I just was never really forced to do so. Editing was passed off for revision. The first time I really revised was last summer, when I took English 101. I had to turn in two of my best papers for a final portfolio, worth 40% of my grade, so I was pretty motivated to really take a look at the papers and try to make them better. That is the first time I really noticed the value in revision, because I could tell that my papers had become much better when I was finished, and I got a 95% for my portfolio grade : ) Still if I can get away without revising, I’m not going to do it. I think this is OK because I am certainly not going to be an English Major. I am willing to revise when it’s necessary!
I haven’t gotten my graded essay back yet, so I am sure there are going to be some specific things I need to work on and I look forward to the feedback so that I can get started with a clearer idea of what I need to do. As far as my own plans, I will hopefully spend some major time on my thesis. I had a lot of great ideas in my first paragraph that I wanted to write about. I created a paragraph or paragraphs for each of those ideas within my paper, which created good content, but I don’t know what my thesis was really… out of all those ideas. I need a more specific purpose for the entirety of the paper.
The other thing I want to work on is making sure that all of the content of my paper is purposeful. Most of what I wrote is… but on the third page I did find myself struggling for length. I hope that I am able to do this revision and sit back afterwards, feeling I have made some really good changes. Fingers crossed.

Here's a video on how to do revision.

Sunday, September 25, 2011

A Passage from Frankenstein


                “The different accidents of life are not so changeable as the feelings of human nature. I had worked hard for nearly two years, for the sole purpose of infusing life into an inanimate body. For this I had deprived myself of rest and health. I had desired it with an ardour that far exceeded moderation; but now that I had finished, the beauty of the dream vanished, and breathless horror and disgust filled my heart. Unable to endure the aspect of the being I had created, I rushed out of the room, and continued  a long time traversing my bed-chamber, unable to compose my mind to sleep” (Shelley, pg. 34).
I found this passage to be important because it describes Victor’s emotions the first time he sees the monster come to life. It is pivotal as the moment that joins “before monster” and “after monster” in the novel.  I remember thinking it was an abrupt description. Right before this, Victor is working tirelessly to put together his creation and bring it to life. Suddenly, things have gone all wrong, as this passage tells. I chose this particular part out of others on that same page because it talks about how fearful he is. Speaking of fear, I think Frankenstein has an overall message and meaning that People fear the unknown, or what they do not understand. This passage is all about fear, “breathless horror and disgust filled my heart.” Also, Victor is seeing something he was not expecting. He is seeing the unknown, and is let down by this! “I had desired it with an ardour that far exceeded moderation; but now that I had finished, the beauty of the dream vanished.” All this time he has spent on his creation seems for nothing now. At the end of this little passage, Victor runs out of the room. This effectively puts the reader’s sight of the monster to rest until later in the novel, closing the door on him until his re-entry. The first sentence of this passage is meaningful, “the different accidents of life are not so changeable as the feelings of human nature.” I take this time mean that one of the things in life that is easiest to so drastically change or affect is human emotion.  His excited feelings go south quickly. This speaks to the rest of the novel… sensitivity of human feelings. This will not be the only time that disappointment is felt.


Immediately after starting to read this novel, and talking to other people who have aswell, I picked up on just how many misconceptions there are about Frankenstein. Here's a good article describing them.

Sunday, September 18, 2011

Draft of Essay #2

Field of Skulls: A Closer Look
Field of Skulls, by Mary Karr, is quite relatable, despite its dark imagery. Three main themes it has are monstrosity, death, and paranoia. Paranoia itself is the monster in Field of Skulls, taking the imagined form of skulls in the character’s mind. This is also where death comes in. The poem explores fear of death and of the dead. It paints a picture of what the mind’s eye might see when feeling scared of the dead; a field of skulls perhaps. Karr effectively seeks to separate that sometimes wavy line between life/death as well as reality/imagination. She points out that humans have the ability to control one’s thoughts, even during those especially dark nights. Paranoia is but a feeling, and it is weaker than our able bodies. Karr uses dark imagery which helps to create a somewhat evil/wicked mood.
  The way the poem is written, the reader becomes the character. “For you: a field of skulls, angled jaws/ and eye-sockets, a zillion scooped out crania” (Karr, lines 10-11). Writing like this speaks to the reader directly and allows them to better relate. Paired with the fact that having full control of our thoughts is a common human desire, the poem becomes especially relatable. Even if we are not thinking up jaws and eye-sockets, everyone has experienced trying to block out a thought. In these lines, the speaker exhibits such a time: “You caress the thought,/ for it proves there’s no better spot for you/ than here, your square-yard of chintz sofa, hearing/ the bad news piped steady from your head” (Karr, lines 20-23).
Paranoia is a powerful emotion. It comes to bother us especially on those dark nights, when we “Stare hard enough at the fabric of night … sleepless, drinking gin after the I Love/ Lucy reruns have gone off- stare” (Karr, lines 1, 5-6). This beginning to the poem presents the setting, one in which a common person could find themselves paranoid. What was that noise out there, the “rustling in the azaleas” (Karr, line 20)? Paranoia is a monster because it is an imaginary “creature” and it is frightening. In Field of Skulls, the image of skulls is a vehicle for paranoia to attack.  Karr gives life to skulls making them The Paranoia Monster, as it were. She then proceeds to demonstrate that the idea that paranoia is tangible and out to get us holds little water. “If the skulls are there-/ let’s say they do press toward you/ against night’s scrim- could they not stare/ with slack jawed envy at the fine flesh/ that covers your skull, the numbered hair,/ at the force your hands hold?” (Karr, lines 28-33). Logic is used here to say that even if your fears are real, if these skulls were to “press toward you”, what could they do, really? Your human flesh holds so much more power than their unadorned bones. All these skulls can do is stare envious of your power.
Skulls play double-duty in this poem, also representing death. Death is a universal concept which many people struggle to wrap their minds around. Many people have a fear of dying, and of the dead. Dead people are scary to American society. We fear the forms in which they may come back to haunt us, like ghosts and zombies. Hollywood has only fueled this fire. An average American’s typical bad dream might consist of graveyards and skeletons. We fear these images. Skulls hold the shape of what they once were: someone’s living, breathing face. It scares us that essentially, a layer of skin is all that separates our own faces from becoming what we fear. But not only do we fear the Halloween-esque aspect of death, we are also terrified of those we love dying. When we have experienced loss, grief eats at us for a long time. Death is something that we must all come to accept, as Karr explores. “You stare and furious stare,/ confident there are no gods out there. In this way/ you’re blind to your own eye’s intricate machine/ and to the light it sees by, to the luck of birth and all/ your remembered loves” (Karr, lines 24-28). These lines mean that we must honor our deceased loved ones by fully utilizing our living minds, because they no longer are able. We must live on for them, and forget our attachment and fear of the empty space they used to hold. This is actually a really deep concept, housed nicely in just a few lines.
Imagery is rich in Field of Skulls, as each line really guides the reader on a path of clear images. The setting of the poem is in an archetypal person’s home. “Drinking gin after the I Love/ Lucy reruns have gone off/ … your square-yard of chintz sofa” (Karr, lines 5-6, 22). Karr also uses the words “night”, “dark”, and “black” setting the mood. “Stare hard enough at the fabric of night,/ and if you’re predisposed to dark- let’s say/ the window you’ve picked is a black/ postage stamp” (Karr, lines 1-4). These words help us to see a dim scene, clearly Karr’s intention. These are also words that tie in with death. Though the poem as a whole conveys messages of overcoming paranoia and fear of death with an overall calm after-effect, whilst one is reading it, the imagery is pretty dark. “Plus minor baby-eaters/ unidentified, probably in your very midst.”
The themes of monstrosity, death, and paranoia are well-explored in Field of Skulls. Karr takes each theme full circle, describing how they affect people and how people can overcome these obstacles in life. Field of Skulls is an appropriate title, representing those many people who have died but are still present in our minds. This relatable poem can help its reader to realize that we have control of our own thoughts, and even though there are many things that might frighten us, the “force your hands hold” (Karr, line 33) is stronger than fear’s grasp.
Works Cited
Karr, Mary.  Field of Skulls.” Poetryfoundation.org. Poetry Foundation, 2011. Web. 18
            September 2011.

I am having trouble with the thesis sentance. I feel like I have a thesis paragraph, but I don't know which sentance within the paragraph I am trying to prove in the paper.

Sunday, September 11, 2011

Response to a Poem

To be perfectly honest, I’ve never liked poetry much. I find it difficult to write about, and that probably has a lot to do with it. I am aware that I’ll have to be writing about poetry in this class, so I will give it my best shot. One poet I randomly discovered in high school and liked was Rod McKuen. Specifically his book Caught in the Quiet. I highly recommend it. But that’s beside the point. The point is that I don’t like poetry too well and also have trouble understanding it. For that reason, I chose the poem Field of Skulls, by Mary Karr, as I understood and liked it the best. I can relate to this poem, maybe not with as dark of imagery, but still. A big part of this poem is that we have control over our thoughts, and that I have experienced, or experienced battling.
There is the theme of monstrosity in Field of Skulls. There is also the theme of paranoia, I believe. I think that paranoia is the monster, taking the imagined form of skulls in the character’s mind. The way the poem is written, we’re the character, “For you: a field of skulls, angled jaws/ and eye-sockets, a zillion scooped out crania” (Karr, lines 10-11). Writing like this speaks to the reader directly and allows them to better relate. Though it is never stated, this poem is about overcoming fear and paranoia. The beginning of the poem presents the setting, one in which common man could find himself paranoid. The middle of the poem serves to feed the paranoia with lines like “plus minor baby-eaters/ unidentified, probably in your very midst” (Karr, lines 16-17). Finally, the end of the poem fights back with logic. “If the skulls are there-/ let’s say they do press toward you/ against night’s scrim- could they not stare/ with slack jawed envy at the fine flesh/ that covers your skull, the numbered hair,/ at the force your hands hold?” (Karr, lines 28-33). The logic here is that even if your fears are real, if these skulls were to “press toward you”, what could they do, really? Your human flesh holds so much more power than their unadorned bones. All these skulls can do is stare envious of your power.
Works Cited
Karr, Mary.  “Field of Skulls.” Poetryfoundation.org. Poetry Foundation, 2011. Web. 11 September 2011.

THIS is quite cool. You can read Caught in the Quiet in its totality here.
THIS helped me to understand paranoia as a theme.

Thursday, September 1, 2011

Summary Vs. Analysis

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Using my prior knowledge and having watched the video, I feel like I have a good enough understanding of summary vs. analysis to be writing a page on the subject. ( :
Summary and analysis similar, this is true. That’s the reason the differences between the two can sometimes be unclear. In my opinion, they support each other. Each is important to the literary world and I don’t see one as better than the other. Yes, analysis is… deeper and therefore I think it is often seen as better, but I disagree because summary and analysis each serve a purpose. Analysis is often times not appropriate, summary will do the job just fine.
SUMMARY answers basic questions about a story, like who, what, where, when, why, and how. It sequences major plot points, describes characters on a surface level, and in general includes information that would be obvious to anyone that read or watched the story. Summary is so tempting for writers to use in place of analysis because essentially it is just purging what we already know, rather than thinking of deeper, more original ideas, as is done with analysis. But summary is very useful when we are trying to describe what a story is about. Like I mentioned there are many times when analysis would be inappropriate.
ANALYSIS answers deeper questions about the story, and the main thing is that it presents an argument. The argument needs to be something not completely obvious. Argument needs to be arguable, that’s the point. Arguments are supported by facts of the story, often things that would have been included in a summary. I see analysis as an interpretation of the summary. Analysis dives in, talking about things like relationships and roles of characters, causes and effects, and strengths and weaknesses within the story. Analyses are often harder to come up with because the writer must think hard, and formulate opinions about why specific elements of the story are the way they are. These opinions or ideas must not be stated in the text, but observed by the reader/(writer of the analysis) and then interpreted into an argument. Analysis I believe is inarguably more interesting than summary, but no more important.


A book I enjoyed in high school was To Kill A Mockingbird. This is a summary and analysis of the first chapter from SparkNotes. It is a good example of the difference between the two.